Pictures in the Mind

I have been practising using words that give readers pictures in their minds.

On Tuesday, my school had our Athletics Day. We did some events like high jump, long jump and sprints.

The first event I did was high jump. We had to get into an order of names and line up in that order for high jump. When we started, I had to scissor kick over the skinny small bar and onto the big blue plastic high jump mat. I ran quickly  to the bar and scissor-kicked really high like I was jumping on a trampoline. The more times everyone went over the pole, it got higher and  higher like a big mountain. When it got too easy to jump over, Karly, who was organising high jump, lifted the bar higher. It started to get challenging for me because it got too high for me to jump over. I got really nervous as the pole got higher. I was as nervous as a pile of snow going to fall off a cliff. Some of the other girls had to sit down and watch Madeline and me because we were the only ones that never made a mistake in some of the first turns. At last, Madeline won the high jump because I could not jump the bar as high as she could. When it was time to finish Mr K rang the siren, the siren was as loud as the fire alarm ringing.  It was time to move to the next event.

Well done, Laekin. I am getting pictures in my mind as I read your recount. I can't see the mat in my mind. Can you please describe it for me.

Tau Ke Night

Yesterday, my school had a Tau Ke night. All the classes did a performance.  

First, we went into the library to wait to perform. Mrs Craven let us watch a movie, Robots. We waited five minutes then we went outside around the back of the hall and waited in the kitchen. I felt bored with all the waiting. First, Room 5 performed. Lots of us were looking in a little gap in the curtains and watching them.

Next, my class performed. I was really nervous when I went on stage. We sang a song called Haere Mai and we did actions to it. After we finished that song, we got some rakau sticks and performed another waiata. I wasn't that nervous because I was not facing the audience, instead I was facing my partner. The waiata was called E Papa Waiari. I had to concentrate really hard because I didn't want to drop my stick down off the stage.
We went off the stage quietly after we had finished. We went down onto the floor in the hall and watched all the other performances. Room 3 performed and sang Toia. I remember singing that song when I was in Room 3.
When Room 3 had finished, Rooms 1 and 2 performed. They sang a song and did the haka. They were really loud like a lion roaring. They were really funny because the song was funny.
Finally, Years 5, 6, 7 and 8 performed. They sang four songs and performed a haka.

Athletics Day

Yesterday, my whole school had our Athletics Day. We had to do lots of activities like high jump, discus, shot put, long jump and sprints.

First, we got ready. First, we all had to go onto the court. We all had to sit in our houses and line up. It was a  beautiful sunny day. We all huddled up like swarms of bees. We practised our chants and said them out  loud. The sun was as bright as a light-bolt shining in the air. All of us said our chants, then we had to walk around the field. After we walked around the field, we had to go do our activities in our age groups.

Next, we did vortex. Before we did vortex, we had to sit in two different lines. All the boys lined up in their lines  and all the  girls lined up as well. First, the boys started throwing the vortex because some of the girls didn’t know how to throw it. The vortex zoomed through the air like an eagle chasing its prey. It  went as high as a rocket in space and  like an airplane flying in the big blue sky.

Next, we swapped over and did some discus. The discus was as wide as an apple. Before we did discus, one of the teachers had to write our names on a piece of paper and put us in order. We all got to have a practise.. Everyone threw the discus really far. I threw the discus 12.62 metres  far. I came first in discus. I was really happy. After we finished discus, we had to sit down and wait for everyone to throw.

Finally, we did sprints. When we did sprints, I was really nervous. I had butterflies in my tummy. When Mr Emmes shot the toy gun for us to start, it was as loud as fireworks. I had to run 50m. All of us ran as fast as darts spinning in the air. When I got to the end, I came third place. I was  really proud of myself. Next, we had to run 80m. When the gun shot in the air everyone ran as fast as cheetahs. Madeline was really fast and she came first and I came third again. It was the end of racing. It was really fun but really tiring.

The activities were fun and lots of things were a bit hard. I was really proud  and happy.